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This is a story that
perplexes me. It feels like it's missing details for all of the characters.
Bailey, his mother, his wife, and three children drive from Georgia to Florida
for a summer vacation. The grandmother seems to be the root character; all of the
action surrounds her. She also plays a bit of an antagonist. She sneaks her cat
on the trip and complains about going to Florida instead of Tennessee, where
she wanted to go. She seems like a nuisance to the family, which reminds me of
the mother from Everything
that Rises Must Converge. However, it isn't clear why the mother is a
nuisance. All the reader gets is how the family reacts to her, which I read as
indifferent or mildly annoyed.
It may be harsh or
rash, but I blame the family's demise on the grandmother. She insists on seeing a
house from her childhood, but realizes she has confused the location and in her
confusion she disturbs her cat, who causes the car accident. Then, she waves
down a car full of murders (of course she couldn't have known this, so I'm not
faulting her here) and then she identifies The Misfit (this is where I place
blame). Even The Misfit says it would have been better if she didn't identify
him. The two henchmen swiftly kills the husband and son, then and wife and
daughter and baby, which I found it odd that the family didn't put up a fight.
The grandmother is the only one that pleads for her life. The details we learn
about The Misfit wasn't enough for me and the discussion of Jesus seemed
underdeveloped.
The line that sticks
with me is "'She would have been a good woman,' The Misfit said, 'if it
had been somebody there to shoot her every minute of her life.'" When I
read that, I felt like Kanye West asking Kobe Bryant "What the $%*# does that
mean?"
The story can be
found here. Check it out and let me know what you think. Happy reading until next time! Next week is two parts on The Name of the Rose.
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